title of the story: I love you & Shi
Fandom: Death Note
name of the criminal
Actually I wanted to finish this shit this time, but after a chapter I could not anymore!
The boring Plot: Sue moves into the secret headquarters of L and of the special one. She convinced her parents with a watertight alibi and at the end of the chapter, all L fans burst into tears.
The anti-quality of the characters: The Sue is stupid and annoying than before. Their alleged intelligence is praised even more this time, but it does behave like a 5 year old.
Ls OOCness reached new proportions, he is now running even OOC.
Only the parents of Sue are cool, who want the bellows that is as fast as possible to get rid of.
What's so bad:
-The dialogues / texts / thoughts are still hollow.
-The plot was wiedermal copied but still you are left with a WTF feeling back
-L and Sue confess in the end their love
-L is stylized into a kitschy, love teenage
-Matsuda is especially mentioned, So now one of the sad victims of this thing
What is ok:
+ RS / GR is ok, even if only extras from the comma rules
+ Wendy Sue's girlfriend does not come before
A taste of horror:
"I know that. That was just a joke and yes, I do it. For I will help you ... And of course the others too. "After I had noticed what I had said I was red.
"Why do you get so red?"
"Because ... I want to eat sweets! "
" Because you something sweet want to eat? "he repeated incredulously.
third Chapter
took for a month Ryuuzaki, Alice and I together a lot. We killed here and there a man, of course, just for fun. Have we not all our hobbies? One collects stamps, the other is riding, and a third is an insane serial killer. The
Sue says she and L " such thing as friends " although who knows it not from his friends that one wants to kill each other?
love etched and clouds the mind. This was fixed. Yes, just like this Sue, who also etches, such as hydrochloric acid, and although they etched away Ls my mind and also slow.
Today was again one of those days. A meeting under "friends". On something I did not feel like! It had to happen to my joy. How about another go with a small, brutal murder? Time for so in the meantime? I mean, hobby murders are healthier than going as a coffee.
The Sue meets thus with L, her friend is not, however sandwiches there. These attempts by their absence "sent" to marry off and Sue L, L which also states. However, this has not worked so far because the two were too smart to date . But no, I assure you that it can not determine the case. If you look up is smart, definitely NOT the picture of Sue. "
He folded his arms behind his head is gripping it? L is even OOC, it's almost art. and we went to the candy shop that was our meeting place, and bought us a lot of sweets. We were both addicted to sweets of all kinds except licorice. The suffering I could at least never before.
"What do we do now? Normally I would take a good book, but I have no more to read. "
says Sue, I doubt that in her life already something other than the Bravo has read.
And no, look for a name in the phone book is one not to "read a book", not really. In any case, the L
asks Sue if she wants to identify with him against Shi. Then he invites you directly to collect in the "special building" in which the Special Commission "Shi" is currently in session. She even gets its own floor.
Here we notice again that Sue has stolen the plot of the original, but somehow they did not understand him.
Well, since Guttenberg is indeed in good company: D Only if someone can return a status of "author"?
I will help you ... And of course the others too. "After I had noticed what I had said I was red.
"Why do you get so red?" I wonder too. Is "I will help you," perhaps Teenislang for: "me eye on you and now wants to immediately try Dr. summer tips with you. "
" Because ... I want to eat sweets " Also probably a hide message, it probably means something like:" I am a Sue run away as fast as you can, "
" Because. what do you eat sweets? "he repeated incredulously. Such a pitiful excuse for my moments where I was red, until now occurred to me before. Pathetic is the word before, what most aptly describes this story.
Here is also the author, that Sue is the grade by 14, so probably there are, unfortunately, annoying parents. Well, Sue would have the most time to get better around the corner, right?
course not. Stupidity seems to be hereditary, because they allow the Sue with 14 to go to a stranger. But with this reasoning ... well, himself read
But why are you telling my parents that I'm going to go to boarding school? If I croak real, then we have a huge problem. More specifically, who are still alive. Did you remember? " fact that the parents in such an illogical reasoning can agree to only two possibilities: 1 The author has forgotten that there is such thing as parents at 14 is yes and has come up in a few seconds, then this excuse. 2. The parents do not care about the Sue and they want to go fast, are likely to adopt them with a "Get out and write us a map.
number one testament to the strength of the story, number 2, I can only agree and love parents who ask you about it long the next time before conception!
Reluctantly, I packed my things. Ryuuzaki pushed that fact that I do not like rumkommandiert was. After 2 hours I was beaten at last finished.
"Can we go now?" I asked the assistant of L. Incidentally, I have not cut it out, dip out the now suddenly? Watari is really the way I have always imagined a ninja.
"Hello Ryuuzaki. Who's that? "Asked a slightly older looking man he was so 40s, but was probably still in top form. The police had to be.
"Hello. This is Kuraiko. She is very intelligent, smart and she likes to talk. " Ryuuzaki respond with hand gestures. I, however, clawed me in his arms and hid behind him. He smelled good Sun
"If they fear us or is this normal?", Then asked a man who, judging by appearance, is as old as Ryuuzaki.
you notice something? Because obviously someone really browsed through the manga and the anime sometimes views the opening. But well, here it is anyway only to police officers who are interested in the super Sue anyway do not need no name, even if they actually play an important role. Pff, who needs minor characters that are always just there to lick the feet of Sue. L
talk some Find out which is great and extraordinary Sue. To spare you that you sometimes just comes up a little puke, just like I was there at the moment, I cut away the. But do not worry, here I have also ne nice passage:
"I am not a child, Ryuuzaki. I'm very mature and grown up. "I broke in me. He had deliberately childish to say to lure me from the reserve. And he'd attempt it great. And then threw the Sue to the ground and kicked wildly with arms and legs, eventually it s going as long to hold their breath until they suffocated. I you would still be quite friendly a plastic bag pull over the head.
"How old is she?" Again asked the elder.
"She is 14 I would have just that "talk" now rather bet on fifth
you get a story in itself. Well, no wonder the ego of Sue needs so much space. Personally, I would assign the lowest, you know, that with the cells and the soundproof doors.
In my, as it were, first own apartment, I let the bag fall to the ground and threw me on the leather sofa.
"So tell on. What should I do? "I asked curiously, staring at the ceiling. She was plain and white. Very intoxicating. The apartment, however, was held in beautiful colors: beige, red, black and white. to feel very good. He came to the leather sofa, picked me up and sat on it properly to then sit next to me.
"The others do not believe in your intelligence. is completely incomprehensible to me. to Himself with 14 behave as 5 but is a clear showing of intelligence, at least when we "how do I craft Sue me for Fools" (from now only available here for cheap 69.99 and if they order now, they will receive a free gift to his own love for Sue) faith.
Sue and L Shi and they talk about the murders.
"Do I believe that you somehow are. The evidence is not just good for me, what evidence L against the Sue in his hand as he ever comes to them and was why the hell is copied again from the plot, without the author suggests that even understood only in the beginning, has all that is not explained. So far, we still lack a proof for the intelligence of the Sue and NO, that it writes a 1 in physics, in contrast to her friend, hollow bread is NOT evidence.
L sighs a little rum and Sue tries to comfort him.
"Do not be sad. I can understand you. Do not worry, we will find Shi already. And lead to the scaffold. " Yes, I would really like the way Sue. Sueigkeit should be made punishable by death or at least life imprisonment
And now * drum roll * a mental whiplash for all L-Fans:
"No, forget it! I understand but no longer. What am I to you? A friend? Are you really in love with me or even love? I should know. Please ... "Now I avoided his eyes.
"I ... I do not know ... A friend already, but I think ... is there any more. "I confessed with blushed cheeks. Carefully, as if I were a china doll, he lifted my face and had to look him in the eye.
Then something happened that I had never thought possible: He wrapped his arms around my waist and kissed me. Yes, surprise, who now wonder that? L is addicted to Sue, so like everyone else. This is typical in spiders, they only send pheromones that convey that they are ready to mate and then they suck out the males. Sues make the similar, until they spray their pseudo charm and then mutate Badfic tortured character without a soul covers.
At this point I ask for a minute's silence for L.
I spare you the nitty further details. Just this: how to write in two rows six times a kiss is a mystery to me.
And to increase the OOCness:
"Yes. I love you. "I breathed over the moon and kissed him briefly.
"I love you too. Leave me never. "He replied, his face buried in my neck flexion.
Again for the record: THE is L and not THE
order to increase the misery of yet another figure is now actually called by name, and thus raped by this Badfic:
"When you had before coming down again? We wanted to introduce us. I am Matsuda and 20 years old. After my schooling I went to the police. " took up the young man who turned out to be Matsuda ago.
* * headdesk more I can not say it.
"Interesting. I have clarified something with Ryuuzaki. See you soon. "I answered back quietly. He nodded a little confused and I closed the door.
"What we have to be resolved?" Asked Ryuuzaki and came to me.
"Yes. Are we a couple or an affair? " And right again * headdesk *
" I would like to look at you as a friend, what I will do, but unfortunately does not so good when I'm with a young girl together. We should keep it for us. " Yes, quite apart from that Olle is suspected of a crazed serial killer to be, but whatever. Age is more important. But beautiful, that there sometimes are drafted.
And tip of the iceberg, so to speak:
"Tell no one. I am L. ", DAMDAMDAAA he whispered gently in my ear. From shock widened my eyes.
, He. Is. My L.. Lover. Is. L. .. How am I going to do that? I ... I am Shi and must kill him ... Or do I kill myself? Who is the latter option, please raise his hand! Why I had to fall in love with him? Why? What have I done to deserve this? Why must I be so damn? I need a new plan. I can not and will never kill my L. Not because I now know who he is. Since I prefer to bring me to ... ' So I can only support this idea wholeheartedly. Incidentally, I have seen just once more clips of the anime, I started to actually short to believe that the presentation is perhaps just as stupid. But no, everything ok, only the Badfic is so bad with the original all right!
Suechen wails around a little, then kills, has disappeared after the L, some people and that's it with the chapter and also with the slating first, because I'm just broken in tears together ... L ... Light ... HELP!
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