Someone seems to find this shit really well and write "Revs". Oh man
story so far:
Part 1: http://community.livejournal.com/verreiss_mich/40251.html # cutid1
part 2: http://community.livejournal.com/verreiss_mich/40645.html # cutid1
History: original
The Author: AuFFwind
I am grateful for the revs. soooooooooo long:) full of love :) (What sooooooooooooooo long reviews that work is missing here definitely a noun) hope you have fun here drann (just ignore my inability to use the German spelling) ? ... how one probably. noted this is the result of a hot disskusion with my mother - and several follow "The Tudors" at breakfast:) is (what, here are but not a confused teen girls Gregor their complex set work)
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(I ) n her head of thousands of other thoughts, all about this strange flash of light circling yesterday morning (A flash of light in broad daylight? Why? He was amazingly long. Why do I suddenly had a coffee cup in hand? haunted Have I the Herd identified? Why can not my stupid friend fly and how my teacher would look good naked. question after question) . Was that really a camera was? If so, by whom? (Maybe a photographer?) And how did this one by itself or Lilly? He really knew their identity, or he had acted on suspicion ? (Who has not, one is constantly photographed in front of kindergartens and schools, people just do not know whether you are famous, but a photo can not hurt) If so, why? In itself it was an ordinary degree student, apart from the fact that with just twenty already a mother of a child, was that in December four years ago was (it was yesterday, not three? The space-time continuum in this universe strange results up to.) Where was ... so unusual that nowadays they do not, considering that pregnancies were not so rare with 14 or 15, as one would like to (actually lower secondary school students, But high school students?). Oh yes, she was at that time was far from being the youngest in her class. All girls who had left it exactly as it (Oops, we landed here in a deprived area?) . Once or twice thought any further, thought he could thereby save the unstable relationship or just looking for love that can not by the parents got (Hach this Mary-Sue is already desperate. clarifications before the first friend to leave someone who can be rapidly pregnant by him. The cements determines everything. Few men can resist a woman he has accidentally pregnant. They are all true-). An address to the nation follows, children can all too often, pregnant because they are just hopelessly kitschy. (...)
But at the latest a few weeks after birth was the most it has become clear that young children had little romantic, for they were now no fucking toy dolls, turn them off by simply let ( Who would have thought damn that again? Well biology class seems to have enjoyed the best ever. Or is it simply unrealistic). is always to blame as the system! The women are informed wrong, no one wants to hear about prevention, we must make clear to women what it means to have a child. Somehow ...
And anyone wondering about the Kevins of the world that have been found dead in garbage cans or flower boxes, but instead of then try to learn more about the can figure out motives of the perpetrators (s) they were sentenced, reprimanded the competent youth welfare offices and that it had been ( * headdesk * This is not a sarcastic, no nasty, this can occur to nothing. Anyone who is writes something .... He has already lost). There was no discussion of the actual problem instead (the lack of maternal brain ), the excessive demands of women (Oh right, yes, children bring with them work and change with it. Had the times a said before I got pregnant) ,
quintessential last five lines: men are pigs, the system is a pig, the women are the victims! The look much pregnant because they do not know better!
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( Another such attempt to socially critical writing fanfictions. When will you finally understand troubled teens? WHEN! Puh, neatly Drama)
"So you're a different opinion, Nadine? ", the teacher pulled her from her thoughts.
"What? Er ... no, no, of course not ... "
" Then explain to us but please once your position on the divorce of Henry from Catherine of Aragon. " (This one has so thoroughly chewed through in school)
" I think ... "began, after a short pause,
is "just the typical male behavior, the major elements in today's time are still to be found. (Because I have so much experience with said male gender, I am not to write norrmales, with the world and inexperienced Teeniegör people who believe I 'm not a secret Emanze. No! I've explored the basics of the male psyche to the most accurate and with my seventeen years done what millionne women have not done before me! )
Here is the proof: The author has actually seen the Tudors, a nearly complete biography follows Henry's
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you (Anna) has made him weak, pressured him . So I think his decision from today's perspective, completely unacceptable and can understand all of who refused to long later, as the rightful Queen Elizabeth to watch. " (A typical Mary-Sue moment. Weak men sex? Well Henry did not at least rumgeheult, and head off is good, knowing how it goes)
The ringing of the bell had to break connectable ; border, ended a two-hour discussion that followed was Nadine's words, or rather postponed (2 hours, 120 minutes, history, in a pointless discussion is that of a troubled teen undeployed , was st, which is already mid-twenties as no surprise that one learns nothing) ...
(blah blah blah the eternally long discussion in the class)
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She had provided the impetus and could defend itself against the attacks of others ( Who does not love it, are constantly in the center and then to be bullied by the other? Any kind of attention is attention).
"Tell me ..." interrupted Laura at last, with which she was on her way to the cafeteria.
"With you and Gregory, however, is all right, all right?" (As she comes on it just because that something is wrong?)
(The friend turns out to be less than Sherlock Holmes, the Tirade of hate on the man's world ... mhh what are we to make of it?
"Nonsense. With us everything is fine. Really. "( Sure, you hate all men, but is able to lead a relationship in which there is a child. Fortunately, it is female. Sherlock probably believes it too. In this universe, they are just all stupid)
Is Greg maybe so stupid, because he is a star? (...) Well, that was a long shot, but ... your mind wandered back to the light flash (How could he made more than a second Remain? Was it not a flash of light but a plasma cloud?). still flutters Greg around, or is in a clinic or tank currently being wherever he is, probably because cell phones are off limits. She writes SMS but no reaction. He could afford it. He was the king, the star on his own lands were his rules (As someone has authority, but a big problem. Or a huge complex. Well, in this universe F-celebrities probably something like Kö Nigeria, especially as in all of Europe is no direct monarchy more) - and she had subordinate to this. Because she loved him. As Catherine. Indirectly certain he lives, damn it to this existence in the shadow that was not really (Because he was indeed in his glory), appeared at their school for at least absolutely everyone well informed about them to be, and was not now willing to help her if all that was in danger (This evil! If I notice, that's a relationship on the rocks, I immediately rush in my Batmobile and try to save what can be saved. Alternatively, yes you are pregnant again. child two rescues the relationship determined) .
The next redeeming ringing followed by eight clock evening.
"Thank God you calling, we must much to discuss ... "
" Hello darling, thank you, I am doing well, my day was great, no, you do not need me to congratulate you on most quality jump, that's natural. "she heard him . laugh (Oho, Gregor seems indeed to have built a very nice ego, where he recently but was a psychological wreck. Oh right, he's also an actor. What a man!)
Houston Gregor We have a problem!
"Is something with Lilly?" He asked, alarmed. Would not the first time that the little one then that a period in which he was not present chose to be seriously ill. (clear, woman and child he does not care, sometimes not, yet again. Eventually, a cardboard box on its role, which remains at least at one position)
"Not exactly ..."
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your child was in danger. Your little Lilly was yesterday may for the first time in her life to the vultures of the media people fell victim and she had failed as a mother (horrible, everyone would know she has let her pregnant. You would Gespö tt the whole be the world! The media sharks are quite eager to finish off people that hardly anyone knows!) . It would have been their job to protect them. Damn, why she had not taken more care? The tears of despair in her eyes and shot it, he seemed to hear. (She should throw the best between the flash and child, plus a loud no time had indeed been long enough yet.)
" Gregory back to his macho: Everything is good, I'll call Mark at!
(But Mark had already called him but he just had not returned. Gregor you ladies man!)
These words were enough to bring them instantly back to the ground and rarely had meant something more honest than their subsequent,
"I love you too. And I had you so happy here ... " (Mary-Sue, you are naive)
" I love you too ... but you know what? In two weeks, and Sapporo denied then-team tour and I'm with Alex, he takes me out of there. And to Sapporo even as I do not say I'm just here for you. Promised. "
A very faint smile crept to her face. (Yes, you can either smile quietly or shouting loudly. The latter should be avoided at dates but that is not proper)
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